BRUTALITY or FILTH …THE CITY LIFE
[Foreward : It took me a trip to my native place (Which is a small Town in Orissa) to realize the varied colors of the "City life" that I have been born and brought up in since I breathed for the first time ... Especially having lived in a City, which in turn is in one of the Most cosmetic states of our Country ,life surely felt lot different in my ancestral home ....So when one day I got an hour to myself over there I just sat in a secluded place and wrote down the below ....Knowing SpunKo, if you do, you must surely expect a helluva lengthy poem ...but as always Its "From the heart" and thus I wish you Patience !!! Read every stanza as a different Characteristic/Topic/Feeling that I want to portray and then afterwards try to link all the Stanzas ...I HOpe you will like it !!!!]
Think all the while of a life in exile
Me all alone in the bushes, all agile
No Traffic, no Bills, no Riots, no Kills
But you could always fall on Nature’s thrills
A life a la Saints of Saffron paints
No Corruption charges and thus no Taints
But can’t yet remember was there ever a day,
Did I ever crave to be a City Slave ??
Here things are different, people all agile
Fast, faster, fastest the motto all the while
People Work, people Drink, people Sleep, but only 40 winks
‘If he does good, I can do better’, is how everyone thinks
Pills, thrills, drills are all that make a day
‘cause Love, Betrayal, Felony all come in the fray
Life is just as clean as Purest mucky water
You’re always on your toes on who’s with your daughter
And now that you are the City Slave ..
Rural life is what you really Crave..
There is a word here we all know simply as CULTURE
Where people sit around some liquid (id=or) pouring all sorts of emotion
They do discussions out of waste just like a dead feeding vulture
And even if they can’t walk, they’re Fine, this is their Notion
I never quite understand why Emotions are compared to a few Liquids
There is even a theory, that you lose your status when you ‘call it quits’
Whenever I see college goers entertain themselves with ‘It’
“That’s child Abuse”, I scream inside, Isn’t it ??
And this is just a glance
Of how City life makes you Dance …
There’s another creed of people who love to see a Foggy day
But how can there be Fog if it isn’t winter or if it is May ??
These are the people who make unique use of paper
They wrap it around certain Poison guised as Black powder
And when they put it between their lips and use it as a Blower
There is born a new class of people called as the freaking SMOKER
Addictive as it may not seem
It’s a harsher killer than even a Devil’s scream
It gets into your lungs to spread a Ghost called Cancer
Or atleast it makes sure your Heart is unable to give your Breath’s answer
This is the most common abuse a teenager does face
Now only thing I can ask for them is Gods Grace
Even though all these seems like the edge of a Knife,
It’s just part of the City life …
There are many more things found in a City’s case
Murders, Road rage, Robbery, Illegal estates
But there is a certain factor that really matters
‘cause LOVE is a universal language that the world caters
Here Affection is categorised into 3 different sectors
Friendship, Business, Relationship namely the Chapters
There is a subtle difference between Friendliness and a Friend
‘cause a Friendly person on one day,on another day may make you the Daggers end
In Business, heavy pockets guarantee you Friends many
But once you are broke, your friends are as less as Penny
And then there is this worldly term called RELATIONSHIP
The virtues of which can be compared to the Titanic ship
When you are a Couple, the world is just Jealous
But when you are Single, the world is Curious
People fear the worst, they ask if you’re Happy (Happy = G*y)
But when you are a Couple, you face a stick called Hockey
Confusing as it is, I really wish people Understand
Atleast for Humanity .. Leave LOVE alone to Stand
And now when I reflect upon all the above things …
I sometimes just feel that I had longed for all these Thrills
Or did I ??? Even if I did or did not …
Brutality or Filth … THIS IS CITY LIFE !!! I shout .
- PB/SpunKo
[Note : ...its complicated .....just in case you didn't quite get the Essence of the above ...here's some help ....
Stanza 1 : Wish
Stanza 2 : The City Life Summary
Stanza 3,4,5 : the 3 aspects/abuses
Stanza 6 : summin up ...
Thanks 4 your patience
-PB]
very well composed..
ReplyDeletemy opinion:
Or atleast it makes sure your Heart is unable to give your Breath’s answer
is the best line..
@abhi ...Thanks mate ....I hope you understood the Complex poem ....I've divided it into parts ....Thanks for reading !!!!
ReplyDeletebro ...so well written ...just keep on writing ....i am just spellbound with your flow of thoughts ..so clear ,so precise ...i suggets you read more literature ...more books ...travel ....this will all help you develop your foundation and which in turn will help you churn out great words ,which will be inspirational to others ....i am proud of you BUA :))))))))))))))))))))
ReplyDeleteThanks dada ...... thanks for the Encouragement .... yeah and reading is something I will have to develop ...I actually Dont read anything except news n Top Gear [+ CSR ..I read it last Month !!!]...hehe ...all words come thanks to TV n movies (Odd source of Inspiration ...lol) ...
ReplyDeleteTravelling is Occasional an thus I guess ,i can Extract a bit more from it ... there can be no better "Travelling" Book of Knowledge than you ??? (You've been all over the Southern Hemisphere!!!) ...Keep Following ...not read any of your Blogs lately ....
Totally awesome ....
ReplyDeleteI like "Stanza 1 : Wish so" so much,-perfect for a RNB/rap song !!
rhyming scheme is good.you should try to write songs. Some Indian Rock Bands really need it :D
@Tej45 ...Thanx buddy ...you looked at a Perspective I really didnt consider .....yeah India needs a Linkin park ...moreover the Old Linkin Parks has just faded away ...
ReplyDeleteHope you liked the meaning of the Poem ...You must have related to all the Things I have discussed ....Thanx for reading mate !!!
Hey Bua, really awesome stuff. You have really come a long from the first poem which you had written. The flow & the structure of you poem is great. How I wish I could think & analyze about things happening around me like you did .. :( Except the spelling mistake of the word comepared (compared), you were simply flawless .. Keep it up dude !!!!!
ReplyDelete@Arijeet dada ...Thanx a lot .... Thanx for appreciating it ....I was expecting a few pesterings .....
ReplyDeletemind you the thought process that went into my first poem was very deep ....It still is very close to my heart (My first poem afterall !!!)
....U wud not beleive me that I wrote this one in one hour Flat sitting in a room alone at my native place .....
I hope I atleast covered 50% of the City Life ... my main factor for this poem has been "The Difference between a Town (my native place) n a City (My residence)" ...
thanx for reading ....I count you as one of my Blogs evaluators ....m relieved to not let you down ...ciao ....
PS : Wanna read a few of your Articles too !!!!
Dearest Bua
ReplyDeleteur just gr8
cnt believe ur from our family complete shayar yaar
wot flow of thoughts
fantabulously fantastic
Im really really proud of u
Love u loads PD
Hey PD .....thanx a lot for reading my blog (For the first time !!!) ....
ReplyDeletein no way m a Shayar ... Actually This was the only poem that just flowed out of my mind into the Notepad i had in hand ....
thanks for your patience n sugary sweet comments (Hope they're true ..hehe)
Keep reading ....not other books ...My blogs ,I mean ....
PS : This is SpunKo or PB ......
Okay first things first , just goes to show when u see a lot of stuff you know what you want to write!
ReplyDeleteI completely enjoyed reading it , but i d like it more if u complement it with another para/poem which also shows some light sides of the city !
Its a dark poem which is really good because dark poems are the ones which are straight from the heart(good thoughts are hard to acquite :P)
Overall i d say pretty much impressed with the way its put up ..the rhyme scheme doesnt let you down with this one , the flow of the poem is worth appreciating
@AJ ...thanx a lot mate .....
ReplyDeleteI actually wanted to show the various abuses a Citizen faces now a days....
n the 3 things I've discussed are surely Gross things ....
I wanted the Mood to be always tense in this poet (m the Dark poet)...I think when I will write a lighter one ..I will sure make u laugh every alternate line...
n in this poem if I had mentioned the Godd factors , they wud have never compared with deadly things like Alcohol,smoking n Friendshipn Relationship ...most of these lead to Death (The biggest penalty) ..while Happiness is something what you can get at any point of time ...n I feel people in City get happy by materialistic possessions ...but a rural guy is the one who gets the Real Happiness...if I wud hav explained these things ,wud surely have been beaten up ....Just yest I gave a person this link (Who was eager to read it) ..n when that person saw the length of the stuff , just politely replied."i wil surely read it later" ...hehe
Thanx for reading !!
Well said...keep it up..i like ur observations ..very true..!
ReplyDelete@apoorva...Thanks a lot !!!
ReplyDeleteHope u didnt get bored by the length of the poem ...
A new blogpost on a similar topic coming up soon ...be sure to read it ....I know its too torturous ...but still try ur luck ...hehe....ciao
why not..
ReplyDelete